Hi!
I just want to say that I love this piece in the game and I love the concept behind this remix. Yoko Shimomura never ceases to amaze me! Here's a list of pros and cons of your piece -
Pro:
- Cool ideas; great concept in general. I was surprised to hear an arrangement of this piece in an electronic format. Very refreshing and new!
- interesting melody to work with, but it surprisingly fis the genre well.
- Nice effect starting at 2:09. It fits that section well and is the definite highlight of the remix. Also, good fade in at the beginning from the piano solo to the main part of the piece.
Cons and Advice:
- (this one is very important) The piece has severe clipping in the melody. The beat is very strong and is drowning out the rest of the piece. Make sure your melody stays on TOP of the beat.
- The instrumentation could use work. The piece's melody is unnerving in a stand alone piano setting. Try adding more to the piano: make a left-hand and right-hand part. Also, the lead synth feels dull. Try either sprucing up the synth or create a synth of your own. Having a distinct lead can give you a unique and memorable sound.
- As I've learned from Newgrounds and OCRemix.org: a remix isn't just about laying down a MIDI and adding new sounds and a beat. It's about letting the creative juices flow into your arrangement. Adding your own flair by creating new countermelodies or even slightly changing the melody can give you an edge over every other remixer/arranger out there.
Overall, the piece is very fun and exciting, and some of the effects fit perfectly. I enjoyed listening to the remix, but the overpowering beat was distracting. Also, the obscure melody in the piano solo needs needs modification. Keep up the good work, and always aim to improve yourself!